Alpha readers have the opportunity to read the manuscript for a book when it is in the very early stages. Alpha Readers receive special benefits.
Often, Alpha Readers have a tremendous influence on the final shape of the book.
Here are some comments that have been submitted by Alpha Readers. As a result of their feedback, I made major changes in the manuscript.
Hi Alan — Congrats on Grandfatherhood! I love the story behind this story.
1. Why does Jack the Cat need to narrate this story? If he does, why are the number of whiskers he has important? Should Jack just be a character in his own separate book? Because he is kind of cool!
2. Counting books are still popular at my library and I think this would fit in with that “genre.” But I would make this story more clearly in Miss Liss’s POV. Also, “Miss Liss” makes her sound like a teacher or adult or something, not a baby. Can she just be “Lissy” or another name?
Although we all love the little games we create with our kids, it’s hard to translate them into books. My primary concern for this is that the illustrations would just be of faces and fingers. I’m not sure they would hold a toddler’s attention. Also, I don’t think Lissy is thinking like a four-month old. Her thoughts sound far older.
I must agree … about the cat. He does sound cool.
I hope this is helpful.
A school for toys is a fun idea:) Reminds me of Rudolph & the Island of Misfit Toys.
I agree with …’s advice. As written, the principal comes up with the solution. Also, there’s no build up of tension. And as … mentioned also mentioned, bully-turns-friend is a common theme, so yours would really need to stand out. Can kids relate to your characters?
Are they cheering for Salt Shaker Egg? The characters are a bit confusing to me. The combination of toys and knickknacks is curious…knickknacks as I know them are not meant to be played with. And the bully is not even a knickknack, but a hard boiled ostrich egg?
Is there some reason these two characters need to be eggs? It seems arbitrary. Think about how you can make your two main characters more fun and relatable to young kids, and let the story grow from there!
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